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Post by 2bAgen. on Sun May 24, 2009 12:43 pm

I was in a haiku mood, so....

Spring

Flowers blossoming.
Leaves and petals all around
Earth welcomes the Sun

Lost

I am alone. Lost.
In a foreign place. Unknown.
I can't find home. Lost.

Snow
White powder or sludge.
Sparkles in the sun or melts.
Beautiful or not?


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Post by xStarr_x3 on Sun May 24, 2009 4:01 pm

Ohh. I like them. o:
I really like the first one the mostest, thoughs. I can picture it in my head.~

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Post by HS7 on Sun May 24, 2009 4:33 pm

Spring
Flowers blossoming, pink and green
Leaves and petals all around
Earth welcomes the Sun

The first line has 8 syllables... Shouldn't there only be five?

Other than that, I like it~!

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Post by 2bAgen. on Sun May 24, 2009 6:18 pm

Something went wrong there.... No idea why it's like that. I'll change it. Since I think I copied the wrong one... confused I'm pretty sure I didn't mean that... confused

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Post by HS7 on Sun May 24, 2009 7:12 pm

XD

Okay then.

I surprised Star didn't see that. XD

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Post by xStarr_x3 on Sun May 24, 2009 7:14 pm

xPP Starr doesn't care for haikus.
If it sounds pretty, it's good in her book.

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Post by HS7 on Sun May 24, 2009 7:14 pm

XD

That's lovely to know.

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Post by xStarr_x3 on Sun May 24, 2009 7:17 pm

I bet it is. C:
Haikus are just too short for me.

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Post by HS7 on Sun May 24, 2009 7:19 pm

XD

Fine~!

What about tankas then?

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Post by xStarr_x3 on Sun May 24, 2009 7:22 pm

...Tankas? I'm cluless as to what those are.

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Post by HS7 on Sun May 24, 2009 7:23 pm

XD

They are another form of Japanese poetry.

They follow a strict patter of syllables, just like haikus.

The pattern is:

5,7,5,7,7

These are longer than hauikus and are usually written when expressing love or connecting with nature.

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Post by xStarr_x3 on Sun May 24, 2009 7:25 pm

Oh. I've never seen one before, I think.

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Post by HS7 on Sun May 24, 2009 7:26 pm

XD

Here is an example of a tanka that tried to combine love and nature:

sequoias in bloom
yellow flowers high above
walking hand in hand
one branch fallen on our path
together now, we look up

From SITE

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Post by 2bAgen. on Sun May 24, 2009 8:05 pm

Ahh... I didn't know about those. I may try to do one... later... When my brain stops thinking CACTUS!

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Post by HS7 on Sun May 24, 2009 9:21 pm

XD

Make one about a cactus~!

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Post by 2bAgen. on Mon May 25, 2009 4:56 pm

But cacti are so random...

Far away, a man.
Closer, a green plant with spikes.
On the desert sand.
Their arms wave hello, goodbye.
Standing, waiting for water.

And that was random too.


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Post by HS7 on Tue May 26, 2009 4:21 pm

2bAgen. wrote:

Far away, a person.
Closer, a green plant with spikes.
On the desert sand.
Their arms wave hello, goodbye.
Standing, waiting for water.


XD

Yes, it was but...

Six syllables? I thought it was 5,7,5,7,7.

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Post by 2bAgen. on Tue May 26, 2009 7:18 pm

My counting is weird...

I'll change that... Maybe...

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Post by HS7 on Tue May 26, 2009 11:43 pm

XD

Now it has 7!

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Post by 2bAgen. on Wed May 27, 2009 7:43 pm

*groans*

I really CAN'T count.

Still, I actually remembered my age! In my french aural/oral (no idea which one...) I hesitated when asked when my birthday was. I don't remember these things.

I will learn to count again...

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Post by HS7 on Wed May 27, 2009 7:45 pm

XD

I will help!

1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9~!

XD

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Post by 2bAgen. on Wed May 27, 2009 7:46 pm

Sometimes I forget my own name! Birthday, age, a lot of the things I should know...

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Post by Holleh on Wed May 27, 2009 7:47 pm

Wait...
I'm confused.
Why do the syllables matter?
EDIT: Nevermind... It's a haiku thingy... Sorry, didn't know...

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Post by HS7 on Wed May 27, 2009 7:52 pm

XD

You know how different poetry matters on things? Like how some have to rhyme? Well, in haiku and tanka, syllables matter a lot. They don't have to rhyme, but they have to follow a strict pattern of syllables.

Haikus: 5,7,5

Tankas: 5,7,5,7,7

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Post by Holleh on Wed May 27, 2009 7:53 pm

Yeah, I know about haikus and stuff; I just didn't know this one was supposed to be one; I didn't really read all the posts.

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