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Cycle

Post by BPahl88 on Thu May 21, 2009 3:26 am

I just made this poem. I like. I was going to to it with colors, but it was too much. So I deleted it and copied this again, regular this time. Anyways, hope you enjoy it!

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Cycle

The lush, green terrain sticks out
Like a sore thumb.
Green is everywhere from the low, central valley,
To the top of the rounded hill.
The flowers bloom early.

The cool, crisp air fills the green arena.
The breeze sings lovely tones of high-pitched sounds.
Blue is the sky and the weather changes
From this to that
And then it turns to shades of brown.

The glorious green has turned to brown.
Day is often.
Night is short.
The sun brings a fierce pounding to our souls
With heat unlike any other.

The children roam free
From their daily teachings.
People are happy.
Fireworks go off.
The leaves begin to fall.

Many colors fill our minds,
Orange, yellow, red.
They diminish from the trees,
And they become bare.
Bare without their greens.

The flu wonders around
Catching anyone in their path.
Children start school again.
The leaves are lost.
Winter is afoot.

All is lost.
No leaves, no green, no warmth.
Fresh air fills the territory.
Ice crystals fall from the sky.
Mother nature is alive.

No animals to be found
In the barring land,
Frozen to its depths.
But Spring will come;
Itís just around the corner.

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Re: Cycle

Post by Hazel on Thu May 21, 2009 6:42 am

I like it Very Happy
It's very discriptive and flows nicely

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Re: Cycle

Post by BPahl88 on Thu May 21, 2009 8:42 pm

Thanks. Smile

I forgot to add this: This poem is (obviously) about the season and how they change. But each season had two stanzas to itself. Just saying. Smile

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