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Post by BPahl88 on Mon Apr 27, 2009 9:27 pm

This may be my... favorite poem I've written in a while. I just wrote it in school today because I was bored, but I had thought of it the night before. Hope you like it! Smile

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They say life throws twists and turns.
It's true.
Your friend has left you and you life.
You've fallen.
A being you know is injured.
You've fallen.
Someone you know had divorsed.
You've fallen.
A one you know and care far is seriously ill.
You've fallen.
A loved one has left your world, your life. Perminently.
You fallen.
But the only person to get you back up,
is you.
You've risen.



That's all. I don't know why, but I think that I could have used... darker, maybe deeper words. Ahh well. I still like it. Crit. and such are always encouraged.
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Post by xStarr_x3 on Mon Apr 27, 2009 10:10 pm

xD So many typing errors, BP.
Use spellcheck or something. xDD
It's good, though. I like the meaning of it.

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Re: Fallen

Post by BPahl88 on Mon Apr 27, 2009 10:58 pm

Of cource...
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Post by 2bAgen. on Tue Apr 28, 2009 6:23 pm

Was that on purpose?

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Post by xStarr_x3 on Tue Apr 28, 2009 8:50 pm

**Course.
Yeah, get a spellcheck. xDD

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Re: Fallen

Post by BPahl88 on Tue Apr 28, 2009 10:03 pm

No, I'll change it soon though. I shouldn't be on 'cause I have a lot of HW to do. tongue
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Re: Fallen

Post by xStarr_x3 on Tue Apr 28, 2009 10:16 pm

Okay. (x
Starr has none-- haha.

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