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The Lights

Post by jeberexa on Sun Apr 19, 2009 8:57 pm

I know its been a long time since I've been on, but I've wrote poem that I'd like to have, um, "reviewed?" (I guess Smile )

Here it goes.

The Lights

A dancing light that twirls
High above the sky
Laughing as it whirls
Casting us an eye

Swirling high above
In shades of green and blue
As silent as a dove
A tranquil, silent hue

They perform a serenade
As graceful as a swan
And like a masquerade
They perform their chant ‘til dawn

It was music to the soul
For many, many years
Our joy was what they stole
It was the lights that took our fears

These days most have forgotten
The lights that danced above
Like joyful rows of cottons
Show’ring endless love

For me, I still think back
To the days below the stars
A stage of painted black
But now we’re wrapped in bars

It was music to the soul
For many, many years
Our joy was what they stole
It was the lights that took our fears.
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Post by xStarr_x3 on Sun Apr 19, 2009 8:58 pm

Ohh.. is this about auroras? It seems like that to me.
Ve'y beautiful. I can see it clearly in my head..

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Post by Hazel on Sun Apr 19, 2009 10:18 pm

Wow, that's really good, I like it Very Happy

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