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Post by Dark Princess on Mon Dec 15, 2008 11:36 pm

Okay, James and some of my friends at school say this poem is really good but I really don't think so. Can you guys tell me what you think?


Tears of joy glistening in
The young virgin mother's eyes
The holy savior is born.

A bright star
Created for his holy night.
His power full of majesty.

Gifts of worth
brought by the wisemen.

A time of forgivness and love.
A time for family
And friends.

Snowflakes swirling
In the silver wind
Of Winter's chilly grip.

All these things
Are around the
Christmas cheer.
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Post by 2bAgen. on Tue Dec 16, 2008 8:30 pm

It's really good, apart from the two lines that stick out...

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Post by Dark Princess on Mon Dec 22, 2008 1:50 am

Thanks 2b
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Post by BPahl88 on Tue Dec 23, 2008 4:19 pm

That's an awesome poem! Especially for Christmas time! 10/10!

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Post by Hazel on Wed Dec 24, 2008 4:04 am

I agree, this is an awesome poem! and fits the holiday well Smile

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Post by DarkenedMoon on Wed Dec 24, 2008 2:17 pm

told you and besides everyone at the concert loved it. Andrew is gonna put it on youtube.
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