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Saying Goodnight

Post by sweetkiss on Thu Aug 14, 2008 4:54 pm

Saying Goodnight
I wrote this poem for my Uncle.. Its for anyone who has lost someone suddenly.. The poem is kind of depressing, but if you could tell me what you think.. Thank you ^.^

I have to say goodnight
But I wish to hold you tight

If I could talk to you again, I would never let the conversation end
This sudden death, I still can't comprehend

If I could hug you again, I would never let go
But now I must wait; wait to say "Hello!"

I hope you're waiting
How I long to see you waving

I wish to hold you tight
But now I must say goodnight..
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Re: Saying Goodnight

Post by Artemis F. on Thu Aug 14, 2008 7:11 pm

*nods* Very nice. Why your uncle, if I may ask?
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Post by BPahl88 on Thu Aug 14, 2008 8:30 pm

Nice poem. Very Happy Very good. Short, but has a lot of power it.
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Post by sweetkiss on Fri Aug 15, 2008 2:23 am

Because last April, he died suddenly from a heart attack.. He was my insperation for this poem..
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Post by Moonlite Knight on Fri Aug 29, 2008 4:47 am

Wow, this is a really good poem, short but powerful.

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Post by Hazel on Fri Aug 29, 2008 5:20 am

I agree this is a very good poem Very Happy

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Post by Broken Heart on Mon Sep 08, 2008 8:11 pm

Amber, I love this poem..
Its very wonderful

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