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Post by RitsukaofLoveless on Mon Jul 28, 2008 12:31 am

Ok, tell me if I should continue this or not.

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Under the black sky, the city of Tokyo stretches out before me as I sit on the wall outside my home. The full moon shines bright amoung small yellow stars and bats fly alone through the quiet Friday night traffic. The gentle breeze ruffles my neatly-trimmed black hair, hazel eyes gazing out over the roof tops with a frown. Sitting here, I sometimes wonder what love is like. Not family, blood-relation love, oh, no. Real-couple love. Going through 9th grade at twelve has been hard on my social life and girls have never been an option. Not at my age. I always thought love as just having a child together and moving on, so why is the right person so important? This thing I ask myself often. Though, I've never received a straight answer. The media doesn't help either. All these love songs, what do they mean? That you can't live without your partner? That you can never leave them, no matter what? And magizines, telling you how to improve your relationship? Why. Why, why, why. These are the things that keep me awake at night, and they refuse to let me rest. My twin brother Cain is just a regular teenager going through middle school, with a huge group of friends and even a girlfriend. Sometimes I wish I wasn't so smart. Then I could be happy like him. I shake my head, closing my eyes. Maybe I need a shrink. Maybe I'm crazy for ever thinking for one second I don't want to be smart. Maybe, yet maybe not. I don't know how to explain it, it's just uncureable. I feel like I have no power over anything I do. What now?

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Re: December times

Post by Artemis F. on Mon Jul 28, 2008 12:40 am

*smiles* I like it. You should show us your point of view, I beleive it's interesting to here how other's think.
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Re: December times

Post by RitsukaofLoveless on Mon Jul 28, 2008 1:21 am

*smiles* Thanks.

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I am Able. The snow, purewhite against the grey sky, falls around my pale face as mother shouts for me from the front door. I turn my head to stare blankly at her, for my hearing has been dulled. Maybe I could try finding the answer at cram school in the morning, I think. Then I find footholds in the vines growing up the wall and jump off, hovering in slow-motion to the damp grass. My head is throbbing. Maybe from the bottle of Pepto-Bismal I drank to make my stomach pains go away. I hug myself around my black turtle-neck waist, following the sound of my mother's voice to the door and allowing her to push me to the base of the steps. She slaps the back of my head. I see stars for a few seconds and my shoulders droop. My head stops bent over from the blow. I wait until her echoing footsteps fade to straighten up and gaze at the banister side. Cain stands, frozen in shock, on the top step. I stare at him pitifully until he makes his way to my side. He helps me to my room and lays me down in bed, scolding me, "Older brother, you need to stop over dosing on medicine! You emptied the entire bottle!" I try to keep my eyes open, "I..." I cannot speak. My words are lost. He lays beside me, "I'm not leaving until feel strong enough to explain youself." I do not argue, but let my eyes close as he covers us in a warm blanket. I feel warmth flood through me and drop into a restful sleep with him for my comfort.

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Post by RitsukaofLoveless on Mon Jul 28, 2008 1:58 pm

The next morning, all feels... different. My head feels lighter, my body heavy, and my mind in a fog. Cain is still beside me and he feels my forehead as I groan.

He sighs, sitting up in the dim light, "Older brother, please be more careful. You aren't sick, can you go to school?" His hand feels nice on my cool skin.

I sit up as well, head spinning. "Yes," I choke. "I can go." I see his doubting expression and his eyes study me, but he says nothing.

Cain watches me rise shakily from the bed and I resist the urge to swallow an IB prophen, straightening up. "I have a test in Geology today." He beleives my lie.

Cain gets out of the bed, setting his hand on my shoulder. "I'm worried about you, Oni-sama. Are you sure you're alright?" I flinch at his kind touch.

Rage surges up inside me. "Yes." I struggle, but keep my temper under control. Good. "Try being more positive. It helps alot." He gives me a quick hug before leaving. Cain has classes as well. I dress with the door open.

I shoulder my backpack and sneak a blueberry cereal bar from behind Mother's back before heading off to school. Avoid Mother as much as possible. That is my main motto. She slaps me, shouts at me, and discourages me, but when I bring home good grades, she is happy. So thats what I do. The sidewalks are empty. The streets are quiet. I spot my old best friend's house, Leon, across the street with a pang of loneliness. He has classes with my brother now, he doesn't talk to me anymore and that can't be helped. I keep my eyes straight ahead. Nothing can be helped.


In class, my pencil flies across the paper as the other teenagers slowly copy the notes on the board. At times, I feel superior around such normal yet older kids. I set my mechanical lead pencil to the desk. Nervousness tingles in my fingers. I pick up the pencil again. The teacher Mr. Allen is passing back our tests. Perfect score... Perfect score... I chant in my head. My eyes widen as he begins at the front of the room. I sit in the back corner with my round-lens glasses. My hand grips my pencil tightly. Perfect score... Perfect score... Perfect score... A picture of Mother's hand poised above my head stings my memory. I swallow. Mr. Allen reaches me with a smile. "Good job, Able. Just like your name," he sets a perfect 101% on my desk. "You are able to be the best student in class." I almost cry in releif. But my composure stays in check. "Thank you, Mr. Allen."


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Re: December times

Post by RitsukaofLoveless on Mon Jul 28, 2008 2:43 pm

Seventh period Advanced Math. I sit on the back near the door, the only other person close to me is a girl named Rachel. She moved here from America. Her hair is a light curly brown, eyes chocolate and skin light tan. She sits in the next row one seat up. I finish my worksheet in minutes, sketching her from my point of view. As a smile dances across my lips, I realize she is fourteen. Second youngest in the class, she skipped one grade, as I skipped two. My mind blanks for a few seconds. Do I dare? It's almost the third month of school, I shouldn't hesitate. So I write her a small love note in my neatest handwriting. It is bright green paper and I'm sure she'll see it. I slip it into her backpack. My heart swells. I can't wait to see her answer.

Rachel finds the note at the end of class and she glances at me before opening it. I blush, packing away my things. As she reads, my head is turned away and I zip my pack before laying my head in my arms on the desk top. I hide my face and close my eyes. Rachel... A few seconds late, I hear scribbles and the note is slid under my elbow. The bell rings and she leaves. Most of the class is left. I lift my head, taking the note in my pale fingers. My heart pounds. I open it.__Alright. But one question. What do you like about school?__ I smile. My answer is clear. The second bell rings and the rest of the class stampedes out. I write down, __The thrill of getting good grades, showing everyone that age doesn't matter. I like being able to have that ability.__ With my head in a fog worse then Pepto-Bismal smog, I walk out with a smile plastered to my face.
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Post by RitsukaofLoveless on Tue Jul 29, 2008 3:02 pm

I lay in bed that night watching TV from my dresser, blue covers thrown about and room spotlesss. Cain appears in my doorway, "Able? You okay?" I turn my head to him, smiling slowly. His eyes light-up. He hasn't seen me smile in ages. I sit up as he sits beside me, voice still weak. "Mom tell you?" Cain nodded. "Yeah. Great job, Able. I'm glad you feel better." I cross my legs, the TV cartoon jabbering behind me. "Thank you, Cain. You've always been there for me." Cain hugs me. "I'm just happy to see light in your eyes." He lays back with me and watches TV until five, then leaves for cram school. I wave at him from my window as he walks down the sidewalk. My spirits have never been so high.

The next day in the hallways, I stand at my locker packing a few things from my pack onto the metal shelves and think about what club I might join. Today is the day all the after school clubs set up stands in the courtyard and people can sign up to merge with what they do. I'm thinking about the GO club. They have a few nice guys in there, and Rachel is a member. Yes. That sounds right. I decide that's the one.

The bell rings as I sit my desk and Mr. Allen makes an announcement. They will be having a drawing for who gets to be the lead in the school's play, Dark and Light. I don't pay much attention. I've never won anything in my life. Mr. Allen takes up ballots with our names on them, sending a boy named Marcus up to the office to drop them off. I finish copying the genetic mutation notes, daydreaming about seventh period. When I glance down at my paper and see a picture of a big heart with Rachel's and my name in it shaded like a pro, I blink. Maybe my mind is trying to get on the outside. I contemplate this until it's time for gym.
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Re: December times

Post by RitsukaofLoveless on Tue Jul 29, 2008 3:42 pm

Second period gym. Not totally athletic, I can only run and play so hard before reaching my limit. But I make several good passes in soccer with my class divided into two teams. My sneakers fly across the smooth wood floor, eyes glued on the ball. It comes between me and another student. I pull my foot back and slam it into the goal, spinning into the air. As I land gracefully in a crouch, my teamates burst into cheers. I rise to my full height with shoulders hunched. Attention isn't what I'm used too. One kid, Ryan, notices my shyness and lifts me onto his shoulders. I squeeze my eyes shut but everyone else laughs happily.

Fifth period art class. We are supposed to draw what describes us. I see self-portraits all around, but I draw a dead bush with ease. Ms. Jackie leans over my shoulder with an eyebrow cocked. I glance at her, smiling. My hands find a few more sheets of blank computer paper and a dry-art set. Ms. Jackie watches with intrest as I sketch the bush getting fuller and fuller on seperate sheets, scribbling neat little lines to make them look 3-D. She smiles and takes my drawings up to the front of the class. Showing them like a slide, she lectures the rest of them about how this was what she meant. "Something growing into something else. Growing or changing in some way, thats how to do it!" I blush as everyone smiles and grins at me.

Sixth period civics. The whole 9th grade is let into the courtyard and I head sraight for the GO club's short line. After standing for several seconds, I sign my name before a stunned Rachel managing the stand. I smile gently at her and dart off to the corner of the school to watch her. Pressing my back to the cool brick, I enjoy the cold wind on my cheeks with a heavy sigh. I feel a throb in my chest and screw my face into a scowl, hands over my heart. After a few minutes, the pain fades but I begin to worry. All that vanishes when the bell rings.

Seventh period math. Ms. Lyyod hands out report cards. I tear mine open.

Math: A
Gym: A+
Geology: A
English: A+
Japenese: A
Civics: D
Art: A

My heart sinks as I stare at the report card in despair. Civics is not my forte. I need a tutor, or someone with brains. Rachel catches my eye. She is smiling. Straight ABABAB pattern on her paper. I sigh. Good job, Rachel. I slide the note onto her desk with a faint smile. Before she can look at me, I bend over to the floor to get something from my bag. I hear scribbling and the note is back on my desk. With effort, I straighten up. I've been stiff lately. The note has a little pink heart on it when I flip it open. __I like how you think. Meet me by the Sakura tree outside after classes.__ I smile and tuck it into my shirt pocket. Ms. Lyyod hands out our homework. We all groan.
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Re: December times

Post by BPahl88 on Tue Jul 29, 2008 4:07 pm

Neat story. Now I am onlky 12 and not to much into love, but it's still a neat story. Very Happy

(And sorry for me to post this soo long after I told you I would read it, I had to clean my room first)
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Re: December times

Post by xStarr_x3 on Tue Jul 29, 2008 4:39 pm

I read this yesterday (well.. the first two parts you had up.), but I didn't comment (I couldn't think of one.) I like reading from different points of view -- it's interesting. Keep going, it's good. =3

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Re: December times

Post by RitsukaofLoveless on Tue Jul 29, 2008 6:47 pm

Thank you. X3
This is gonna get weird, beware, if you still want to read it.
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Re: December times

Post by xStarr_x3 on Tue Jul 29, 2008 7:06 pm

I'm all for wierd.
You should see some of the stories I've read. o.0

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Post by RitsukaofLoveless on Tue Jul 29, 2008 8:20 pm

I sit back in my seat with my arms crossed. My eyes are closed, I'm tired from last night. Earlier bed time from now on. My chin falls to my chest. Pictures of Rachel pop up in my mind, dancing before my eyes. I reach out to her and she takes my hand. We pull each other close. I smile, so does she. The darkness we're hovering in seems to fade to white with us together. "Attention all of Kurogane high school," A voice breaks us apart and I wake from my dream. Jerking my head up, I see Rachel smiling at me, but she turns away as the principal continues. "We have a winner of the Dark and Light contest. Will..." Everyone leans forward in their seats but me. "Able Kazeno and Rachel Ochite join us in the office for their scripts?" I fall backwards in my chair. Rachel and half the class gasp, but only she runs to my side. I am utterly stunned. The only thing I see is her pretty face and her wavy hair helping me up. She blinks at first when she sees my expression, but laughs after a few seconds. I blush. The teacher ushers us into the hallway with our backpacks and tells us our homework is cancelled, making her and I smile. Ms. Lyyod scowls, closing the doors in our faces as we look at each other. I hold out my hand with a gentle expression back on my face and she takes it and giggles. We both dart off down the hallway twords the office on the upper level.
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Re: December times

Post by xStarr_x3 on Tue Jul 29, 2008 8:23 pm

You said it would be wierd.
That wasn't wierd.

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Post by BPahl88 on Tue Jul 29, 2008 8:34 pm

Nope, not weird at all. But still good. Very Happy
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Re: December times

Post by Bran Davies on Tue Jul 29, 2008 9:14 pm

OMG!! This is awesome! Oh, hi, Ritsuka! Sorry I hasn't said hellur, but I waz busy 4 the longest time!! Gr8 story!! U rule!!!!
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Post by xStarr_x3 on Tue Jul 29, 2008 11:07 pm

It was good.
I forgot to add that in my post.

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Post by RitsukaofLoveless on Tue Jul 29, 2008 11:26 pm

Thank you.

That wasn't the weirdest part.
*clicks lead pencil* At least... not yet.
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Rachel and I enter the office together, inching up to the desk. The woman behind the counter smiled at us. "Here they are," she hands us two paper packets no thicker then my pointer finger. "Report to drama club tomorrow for rehersal." Rachel jumps for joy and I laugh. She leans close to me, kissing my cheek. I blush. With a giggle, she takes my wrist and leads me out to the courtyard. I try to argue her into going back to class, but she pulls me under the cherry tree instead. My crystal eyes lock on her's. She takes both of my hands slowly. My blush dulls. The wind blows pink Sakura blossoms all around us. Stepping up to her, I feel her press against me. She and I are the same height, suprisingly. Our fingers merge together, a perfect fit. I feel nothing but her sweet breath against my lips and my mind blanks. Leaning forward, our lips touch. Pressing together like nothing in the world meant more. Rachel's mouth against mine tasted like the flowers that grow in peace, valleys and medows growing nothing but this wonderful flower. As we part and she smiles, I smile back gently, hovering together. I lean my forehead to her's as she closes her eyes. BBRRIINNGGG!!!
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Post by RitsukaofLoveless on Thu Jul 31, 2008 1:41 pm

Walking home that day, I wait in a crowd of people who are also waiting to cross the street. They are silent and staring straight ahead. I smile as the light turns and we all stampede over to the opposite sidewalk. With a jump and a kick, I'm crouching ontop of the wall outside my house. I lower myself down carefully and wince at the pain in my chest. Cain comes up behind me, home from his own classes, and grins at me. I smile back and forget my pain once more, following him up to the house.

We sit on my bed doing homework like good little twins while mother cooks dinner for the first time in months. She is making beef noodle ramen. My favorite. I finish up the last of my assignments, packing my things away neatly and shoving my backpack to the side.

Cain studies me instead of his paper. I move across the bed as if in pain. He stares into my eyes, seeing only suprise as I settle beside him, "Brother," he sets his hand over my shirt where my heart is, "are you alright?"

I feel my heartbeat, slow and unsteady. My black head shakes itself, "I don't know, I've been feeling weird lately."

Cain frowns worridly, eyes tightening, "Want to go to the doctor?"

I set my hand over his and nod, "Tomorrow after school."
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Re: December times

Post by xStarr_x3 on Thu Jul 31, 2008 1:47 pm

Keep going.
It's getting interesting.

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Post by RitsukaofLoveless on Thu Jul 31, 2008 2:24 pm

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The next morning, Cain and I walk to school together. I drop him off at the middle school, heading for the high school myself. Rachel meets my halfway and takes my hand. "Morning, Able." I force my best smile back. Her's fades. "What's the matter?" I wince. She sees right through me. "Nothing, just..." I think quickly. "Not in the mood to smile." She presses close to me. "Alright. Then I'll smile for both of us." Now that makes me smile. My chest throbs every now and again, but I'm stable. For now, anyway.

First period, Mr. Allen with Japenese, I glance over at Rachel. She's working steadily, writing in cursive her notes as I have already finished. My chest hurts terribly, but I keep my mouth shut. Takins slow, silent breaths, I endure the suffering and close my eyes. Mr. Allen appears at my side, "Able-kun, are you still with us?" I open my eyes to gaze pleadingly up at him, breathing wavering. His expression turns grim, "Rachel," he glances up at her, "Fetch the nurse." Rachel hurridly closes her notebook, "Yes, Sensei," She darts from the room as Mr. Allen checks my pulse, "Able?" I cough violently as my chest tightens. His eyes widen and he whirls to the rest of the class, "Someone call the hospital!" The children all take out their cell phones, some off some not, and dial 911. I clutch the front of my shirt with both hands, teeth gritted. My chest feels like it's on fire. Mr. Allen pushes my chair away and lowers me to the floor in his arms, "Hang in there, Able." I try fighting the darkness, the pulsing red lights surrounding me everywhere I turn. Opening my eyes to small slits one last time and gazing up at Mr. Allen, I smile a pathetic, I-know-I'm-gonna-die smile. A string of ultra strong pulses forces me to curl into a ball and moan. Sirens scream outside. Lights flash. Children shreik. But I am silent.
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Re: December times

Post by HS7 on Thu Jul 31, 2008 2:29 pm

Ouch. It could use a lot of spacing. It's easier to read that way.

Near the beginning, I did the same thing. My life was similar. But as it got farther in, it grew different.

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Post by RitsukaofLoveless on Thu Jul 31, 2008 2:35 pm

Same here. *sighs* I'm just glad it's not like that anymore...
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I feel Rachel's lap under my head and her hands on my face. I snuggle into her warmth as my eyes begin to close. The next thing I glance is a peramedic crouched over me and my smile plasters in place.

I allow my head to loll to the side, staring into blackness closing in on me as my breathing begins to stop, "Able! Able, don't give up!" Rachel's voice snaps me awake. She calls for me. Inspite of my exausting efforts to keep my heartbeat under control, I re-open my eyes and breath accordingly. The people crowding me are frightening, but Rachel is my comfort.

I swallow and gaze upside-down into her damp face, my eyes widening. I made her cry... A breathing mask is placed over my face. I reach my hand up shakily, wiping a tear from her cheek with my finger with a real smile. She takes my hand and cradles it against her face.

The room spins and darkens. I am confused. Then I taste the air they are feeding me. Morphine... I relax into their grip as I am lifted off the ground into a soft cloud, flying through the people and out into the hallway.
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Re: December times

Post by HS7 on Thu Jul 31, 2008 2:36 pm

Wow... I'm starting to think it's weird...

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Re: December times

Post by RitsukaofLoveless on Thu Jul 31, 2008 2:39 pm

*laughs* My life might be similar, but I've never had a girlfriend.

See. I knew it was gonna get weird.
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Post by HS7 on Thu Jul 31, 2008 2:41 pm

And I have never had a boyfriend...

I have read weird things in some point of my life. But I think this is the weirdest thing yet...

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