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Survival of the Fittest

Post by xStarr_x3 on Sun Jul 27, 2008 2:54 am

Only the fittest can survive,
The weakest never do.
Its the life I live,
That some dont make it through.

Only the fittest will survive,
The rest never do.
Its everyone for themself,
The rest can make due.

Were the fittest.
The strongest.
The best out of the rest.
Were the ones who make it through.

Its survival of the fittest,
A test that everyone cant pass.

We give a new meaning to survival.

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Re: Survival of the Fittest

Post by BPahl88 on Sun Jul 27, 2008 5:01 am

Neat poem. But I do feel that something is wrong. I mean, no offence, it's still a great poem, it's just that I feel this is... arg... I can't think of the word. Or phrase. I'm not thinking today.

(I just got finished watching an old episode of Pokemon. Don't ask me why, because I don't even know, but I did. Happy So that's probally why I can't think. Happy )
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Re: Survival of the Fittest

Post by Moonlite Knight on Sun Jul 27, 2008 5:13 am

Nice poem! I really like the first stanza. The only thing is, after the second stanza, the flow of the poem gets kind of disrupted. Maybe it's just me, sorry. Anyway, I really like the idea behind this poem!

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Re: Survival of the Fittest

Post by xStarr_x3 on Sun Jul 27, 2008 4:21 pm

I wasn't even thinking of flow. xD I never really do, either. So that may be the problem there..

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Re: Survival of the Fittest

Post by RitsukaofLoveless on Sun Jul 27, 2008 4:24 pm

I like it.
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Re: Survival of the Fittest

Post by Hazel on Mon Jul 28, 2008 7:49 pm

I think it's good to. It's pretty true too Very Happy

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