My Cusėth

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My Cusėth

Post by GoMulchGo on Mon Jul 07, 2008 9:55 pm

This is about the Cusėth from Scottish mythology. It is pronounced "coo shee."

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My Cusėth. The Cusėth
Is feared by most but not me.
The "evil" Cusėth is alone
When he chills your bone.

His three loose barks
Were heard by sharks,
and warned all farmers
to hide their charmers.

I shan't fear him
And his only whim,
to feed his needy issue.
You shan't fear him too.

He was a beautiful beast
When he wasn't deceased,
But now he's just a myth
And the dirt is all he's with.


My Cusėth. The Cusėth
Is feared by most but not me.
The "evil" Cusėth is alone
When he chills your bone.
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On the second link(issue) the definition is the 6th noun.
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Re: My Cusėth

Post by BlackOpal on Mon Jul 07, 2008 10:39 pm

Great job. Very Happy
I like the poem a lot.
My only suggestion (that barely is a suggestion, and really is just a pondering) is that you seem very limited by your rhyming scheme.
I feel like you might have been able to express yourself better in free verse.
But as it is you did a great job with the rhyming, and only a few of them were awkward sounding.

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Re: My Cusėth

Post by GoMulchGo on Wed Jul 09, 2008 6:18 am

I know I didn't do a very great job. I was in a hurry so I made it a little short. If I made it longer I could have added some more repetition, then it would have sounded better, but this was my first poem. Neutral
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