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Illness

Post by BPahl88 on Thu Jul 03, 2008 2:32 am

I ache in pain.
I hate this strain.
I sit and sneeze
And cough and wheeze.

I hate being ill
And I hate Nyquil.
Its not what I need
And I hate being babied! *Looks at my mom*

I hate this condition
So Im on a mission.
To get well soon
Come on immune! (system. It was suppoed to be immune system, but it didn't rhyme)

The next day is here
And I am all clear!
Yippey-ka-yay!
Oh happy day!

Critic is always appriciated. Very Happy

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Post by Hazel on Thu Jul 03, 2008 2:34 am

Aw great poem! Being sick sucks and you described it well! Very Happy

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Post by BPahl88 on Thu Jul 03, 2008 2:36 am

I actually tried a different writting style this time. So something new to me. And yes, I hate being sick tongue Sicky

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Post by Moonlite Squire on Thu Jul 03, 2008 2:38 am

Thats a really nice poem. Very Happy

I hate this condition
So Im on a mission.

Loved it!!

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Post by Moonlite Knight on Thu Jul 03, 2008 2:48 am

Haha, awesome! I loved the first stanza the most. And you're right, being sick stinks Sicky

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