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Red Dress

Post by OliviaofBolivia on Fri Jun 20, 2008 2:46 pm

There she sits
Her closet door closed
Hanging from the back are two dresses

A long elegant black dress
with black heals to match
its hems are lined with diamonds
and its sleeves are ribbons that dangle off

Then there is the red dress
Short and satin
its sleeves are bordered to the arms and dont hang off the shoulders
Red Prada shoes went along with then dress
She could walk perfectly in them
The showed off her legs in a way she liked

It was a dinner party
Thats all
Her boss and friends would be there
So which should she choose?

She got up and started to reach for the black dress
but she stopped
She looked at them again
A smile crept across her face

Then she grabbed the red dress
She put it on
and was out the door

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So remember me but do not cry
I am not even there
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Re: Red Dress

Post by BPahl88 on Fri Jun 20, 2008 3:49 pm

That was very good! I think you made one mistake and that is in the fourth stanza, it should be "which" not "witch". I'll fix it for you. Very Happy
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Re: Red Dress

Post by Moonlite Knight on Sun Jul 06, 2008 10:12 pm

That was really good! Great job! I loved how you ended it Very Happy

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