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Post by Moonlite Knight on Mon Jun 16, 2008 2:32 am

No one has been able
to drink the sea.
No one has been able
to live alone.
No one has been able
to see in the dark.

Yet this stubbornness,
no one but you has shown.

I only want what’s best for you.

What must I do to prove
That I am your parent
And your are my dear child.

To the world, my love is so apparent.

No one denies this.
No one but you.
~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~
This is supposed to in the view point of a parent, do you think I managed that?
Please tell me what you think. Thanks Like a Star @ heaven

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Post by Hazel on Mon Jun 16, 2008 2:35 am

Yep, I can see this as a parent thinking/talking to their child...I thought it was pretty true as well, great poem Very Happy

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Post by BPahl88 on Mon Jun 23, 2008 4:08 pm

Very good! Very Happy
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