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Yesterday, Today, and Tomorrow.

Post by xStarr_x3 on Sun Jun 15, 2008 10:54 pm

Nothing's going as it seems,
The future is
Dull.
Black.
Suffacating.
Life's wasting away,
Something was wrong with yesterday.
Today isn't going as planned,
Am I the only one left to stand?
To suffer in this bleakness?
To be lost in eterniy?

No.

Yesterday's waste,
Today's grace,
I wait for the future's brace.

This is my life.
I'll run it my way.
It will not
Wither.
Die Out.
I will not cry out.

Because if you've wasted yesterday,
What's the point of today?
The future's waiting.

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I wrote this last night at like, 12am. xD My sister was having a party and it was loud..
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Re: Yesterday, Today, and Tomorrow.

Post by OliviaofBolivia on Sun Jun 15, 2008 11:00 pm

I like it!

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Re: Yesterday, Today, and Tomorrow.

Post by Moonlite Squire on Mon Jun 16, 2008 1:11 am

Today isn't going as planned,
Am I the only one left to stand?

~loved that part! Smile
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Re: Yesterday, Today, and Tomorrow.

Post by Moonlite Knight on Mon Jun 16, 2008 2:09 am

That was awesome! I loved it, espically the last stanza Very Happy Just one thing, I think you misspelled suffocating. Also this part is kinda confusing to me, "I wait for the future's brace." Did you mean "embrace"?

Anyway, that was a great poem! I loved the theme and message in it Very Happy

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Re: Yesterday, Today, and Tomorrow.

Post by Hazel on Mon Jun 16, 2008 2:22 am

Great Poem! That was really good Very Happy

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Re: Yesterday, Today, and Tomorrow.

Post by xStarr_x3 on Mon Jun 16, 2008 1:04 pm

I thought I mispelled suffocating.. thanks for pointing that out.
The word embrace never really crossed my mind during it, but it works well.
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Re: Yesterday, Today, and Tomorrow.

Post by BPahl88 on Tue Jun 17, 2008 5:31 pm

Neat poem! Interesting. Very Happy
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