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Bleeding Out

Post by OliviaLuna on Fri Jun 13, 2008 6:43 am

Im Bleeding Out
the wound wont stop
blood is everywhere
Im bleeding out

Im bleeding out
its getting worse
No bandage can contain it
and yet
there is no blood
no wound
no pain

but I can feel it
I can feel all of it
I can feel every inch of it
I can see the blood
I can see the wound

Its on the inside
Of me
Why?
I dont know
But Im bleeding
Im bleeding out
Im digging deeper
deeper
Reaching deeper in
Get to the center
Until
Until it finally stops

I'm bleeding
Im bleeding out
Im digging
Im digging deeper
Im bleeding out
Digging deeper

Im facing myself
My wound is myself
And as I face myself
My wound stops bleeding
And eventually
I grow
I change
And I heal
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Re: Bleeding Out

Post by Hazel on Fri Jun 13, 2008 6:47 am

Whoa, great poem. Awesome job! Very Happy (it reminds me of a song called Bleeding Love, hehe)

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Post by jeberexa on Fri Jun 13, 2008 6:57 pm

That's a nice poem, OliviaLuna. I liked the style of writing.

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Re: Bleeding Out

Post by BPahl88 on Sat Jun 14, 2008 1:19 pm

That was I neat poem. (Even though I will admit I am sqrumish when it comes to blood. Ick...)
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Post by Moonlite Knight on Sat Jun 14, 2008 5:17 pm

That'a an awesome poem Very Happy I love the last stanza the most.

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Re: Bleeding Out

Post by OliviaofBolivia on Sun Jun 15, 2008 7:21 pm

YA that was a really good poem! I like the last stanza as well. It was really good and it was very deep. It reminds me of the one song Bleeding Out by um Linkin Park! Oh and it does remind me of Bleeding Love too.

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Re: Bleeding Out

Post by Moonlite Squire on Mon Jun 16, 2008 1:14 am

That was nice. Reminds me of something that happened to me.
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