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Liar Liar

Post by OliviaofBolivia on Thu Jun 12, 2008 5:09 am

Dont you dare
Dont you dare
Look me in the eye
Not after that
Not after what you did

I can't look at you
I can't talk to you
without
without feeling pure hate

how can you do this
to me
and feel the same
or nothing
I dont know
But I know you cant feel remorse

Ive stolen for you
cheated for you
lied for you

and you do
do THIS!
I cant believe it

you betrayer
you back stabber
you
you
you LIAR!

dont look at me
never again
dont ever look at me
dont talk to me
cause I wont hear
and I dont care

Spoiler:
So go away liar liar
and lets hope I dont set you pants on fire

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I am not even there
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Re: Liar Liar

Post by Moonlite Knight on Thu Jun 12, 2008 5:30 am

Nice, it's almost like a song Very Happy I like the first and third stanza the best, great job!

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Re: Liar Liar

Post by OliviaofBolivia on Thu Jun 12, 2008 5:37 am

thanks!

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Re: Liar Liar

Post by Moonlite Knight on Thu Jun 12, 2008 5:49 am

Lol, nice lines in the spolier Very Happy When I saw your title, the last line was the first thing that pooped into my head Very Happy


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Re: Liar Liar

Post by Hazel on Thu Jun 12, 2008 6:12 am

Great poem! That was really good! I loved your spoiler too that was hilarious! Very Happy

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Re: Liar Liar

Post by BPahl88 on Sat Jun 14, 2008 2:24 pm

That was a nice poem. I agree, I like the spoiler. He he ... Very Happy
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Re: Liar Liar

Post by jeberexa on Sat Jun 14, 2008 3:14 pm

Ha...that was funny! I loved it.
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Re: Liar Liar

Post by 2bAgen. on Sat Jun 14, 2008 3:15 pm

Really good. And the spoiler as well!

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Re: Liar Liar

Post by Moonlite Squire on Sun Jun 15, 2008 4:38 am

Really Good!! Cool
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