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Post by Hazel on Wed Jun 11, 2008 12:25 am

My Immortal is a song by Evanescence....this is probably the weirdest thing I've ever written. And I'm not even going to lie...I'm not sure I'm too happy with it. But I took the song and kinda narrated it. I don't know why, I was just bored I guess but anyways here it is.... (oh and I'm sure that the song is about something totally different, I just made this up)

I looked around at the dark gloomy house where I had lived for the past 20 years. Here I had lost a child when she was still young. I could never leave although I often thought about it. I sometimes thought that I could feel her ghost around me. And the more I tried to ignore it the more it insisted on bothering me.

I'm so tired of being here
Suppressed by all my childish fears
And if you have to leave
I wish that you would just leave
'Cause your presence still lingers here
And it won't leave me alone


I couldn’t even get rid of any of her toys or clothes because it was just too sad to go through all those things. It has been years since she was alive but I have not forgotten her.

These wounds won't seem to heal
This pain is just too real
There's just too much that time cannot erase



I used to be very patient with her. She was a special child that I cared for more than anything else in the world. She has a very special place in my heart.

When you cried I'd wipe away all of your tears
When you'd scream I'd fight away all of your fears
And I held your hand through all of these years
But you still have
All of me


Everything she did was beautiful. And I was amazed by her and the pleasures and joys she brought me. But then she left, leaving me behind. But everything I look at puts an image of her in her mind, testing me sanity.

You used to captivate me
By your resonating light
Now I'm bound by the life you left behind
Your face it haunts
My once pleasant dreams
Your voice it chased away
All the sanity in me



I’ve convinced myself that she is longer with me in the sense that she used to. And even though I can feel her she has left me alone. And here alone I remain.

I've tried so hard to tell myself that you're gone
But though you're still with me
I've been alone all along

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Re: My Immortal

Post by Darklady on Wed Jun 11, 2008 6:49 pm

That was really good H! I have to say, it was a little different perception wise from mine. (If that makes sense) But good nonetheless.

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Re: My Immortal

Post by Moonlite Knight on Thu Jun 12, 2008 6:50 am

Wow, that's really good and sad. Crying or Very sad

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Re: My Immortal

Post by BPahl88 on Sat Jun 14, 2008 1:00 am

That was great! Very Happy
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Re: My Immortal

Post by jeberexa on Sat Jun 14, 2008 1:53 am

Yah, great job!

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Re: My Immortal

Post by Sirch Hanom on Sun May 31, 2009 8:08 am

I love that song, especially when it is set to a dramatic montage.
Doesn't this Forum have a poetry section to put it into? I think it's more poetic than narrative. The actual narrating lines could be put into non-rhyming little interludes. COuld be a good poem.
Watch out for Evanesence and their copyright lawyers, though.

Post Script (PS): I suggest the song "Everything Burns", possibly the one set to Gaara scenes from 'Naruto', for your listening pleasure.
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Re: My Immortal

Post by Hazel on Sun May 31, 2009 9:31 pm

Yes perhaps it could.....*muses* It's something random I wrote when bored...I didn't really think about copyright laws, I suppose I didn't think it mattered because it's not as if I'm publishing it or making money of it..... XD

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Re: My Immortal

Post by Sirch Hanom on Mon Jun 01, 2009 2:05 am

Oh, i'sall right. Y'ain't gonna get sued or anythin'...just a joke. I don't know how written copyright works, though...audio copyright, maybe.

DON'T SUBMIT THIS TO 'BOOKS ON TAPE'!

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Re: My Immortal

Post by Hazel on Mon Jun 01, 2009 3:24 am

Gotcha Wink
Alright, I'll keep my work to myself Razz

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