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The Bottom Of This Sea

Post by Sofie on Sun Jun 08, 2008 12:35 pm

The Bottom Of This Sea
by Seth Wreckage

My blinded mind and I
We hope to find some hope
At the bottom of this sea
Stormy dreams can't complete me
All alone, the stone will beat me
'Till I'm black and blue
Am I me or you?

My angry greed has grown seaweed
As mouldy nothings break my skull
The world is dull
I'm lost forever

Lost
And my twisted thoughts leak
Mixing with impurity
At the bottom of this sea.





Written for a challenge on a random forum-like thinger...
They think I'm a guy.
And an eskimo.

People are weird. But anyhow.

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Post by 2bAgen. on Sun Jun 08, 2008 1:45 pm

I like that.

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Post by Moonlite Knight on Mon Jun 09, 2008 5:47 am

That was really good, I liked it. I don't see why it makes people think your a guy or eskimo though. Anyway, my only critc is that the beginning of the last stanza seemed a little off, to me. Anyway, good job Smile

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Re: The Bottom Of This Sea

Post by BPahl88 on Sun Jul 06, 2008 1:59 am

Nice poem. I agree, that part MK said was off in a way. Very Happy
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