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Post by Moonlite Knight on Tue Jun 03, 2008 2:56 am

Life is not like
The wind in your hair
Free and wild
Without a care.

Life is not like
The sea at your feet
Constant and pure
A steady beat.

Life is so like
A lit candle
Blown out so fast
With no handle.

Life is so like
Our home, the earth
As time goes by
We fade into her warm brown dirt.

Life is like so many things.
Life is like nothing at all.
I have yet to find an
Answer that satisfies all.

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Was that too confusing? Please tell me what you think, thanks! Like a Star @ heaven

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Re: Life

Post by Hazel on Tue Jun 03, 2008 5:23 am

Whoa super true! Great poem! Very Happy

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Post by BlackOpal on Sun Jun 08, 2008 11:29 pm

I like it a lot. Very Happy
The candle thing reminds me of Macbeth. (Out, out, brief candle).
Very well written. A couple of the rhymes were off, but not too badly.
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Post by Moonlite Knight on Mon Jun 09, 2008 4:18 am

Ha ha, yeah, the candle part was inspired by Macbeth. When I wrote this, my English class was focusing a lot on Macbeth, so I had that on my brain. Thank you for telling me your opinions! Very Happy

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Post by BPahl88 on Fri Jun 20, 2008 3:56 pm

Awsome poem! I like how each stanza started with ''Life is like" or something similar to that. Very Happy
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