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Post by OliviaofBolivia on Sat May 31, 2008 4:52 pm

I stand upon the ground
Now dont I?
I drink the river water
Dont I?
I speak the language
Dont I?
I run the mile
Dont I?
I know the song
Dont I?
I love the man
Dont I?
I have a life
Dont I?
I was born
Wasn't I?
I was here
Wasn't I?
I was
Was I....

No I wasn't
I never was
I never did
I've never been
I never will be
I was never there
There is no proof
There is no trace
I have no body
nor a face
I was not, will not, and can not.....
be
not me
I can not be me
for there is no me

but there is proof that I was there
that I was here
Just no one can see it

But I....

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Do not cry when I am gone
To make me feel that I am loved
You'll see me just beyond the dawn
Or maybe look above
Do not cry on my behalf
Instead stand up, yes, get up and laugh
I wouldn't even care
So remember me but do not cry
I am not even there

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Post by Darklady on Sat May 31, 2008 7:47 pm

That was good, but a little confusing at first.

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Post by Moonlite Knight on Mon Jun 02, 2008 12:33 am

That was awesome. I adore the message, becuase I sometimes wonder that too, I know I was alive, but does anyone else? Will people 50 years from now even know that there was once a person like me alove? Anyway, I loved it! It wasn't all that confuisng to me though.

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Post by jeberexa on Mon Jun 02, 2008 9:14 pm

I liked it, it was an interesting poem and a great way to stretch the brain.

I didn't think it was that confusing. Smile

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Post by BlackOpal on Mon Jun 02, 2008 10:31 pm

Ooh, I liked it.
The only possible concrit that I can give is that after a while the questions got the tiniest bit annoying.

But it was very good. I liked it. Very philosophical.

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Post by BPahl88 on Tue Jun 03, 2008 12:05 am

That was good. I do agree with BlackOpal, it did get a little annoying during the last, maybe two, but it was still unique! Very Happy

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Post by Moonlite Squire on Tue Jun 03, 2008 12:43 am

Great poem!!!!! Loved it Surprised

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Post by Topaz on Fri Jun 27, 2008 3:32 pm

great poem! Razz

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