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Post by Hazel on Mon May 26, 2008 2:13 am

((poem removed by author))


Last edited by Hazel on Wed Jul 22, 2009 5:54 am; edited 2 times in total

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Post by Moonlite Knight on Mon May 26, 2008 2:21 am

That was really good, and true! I liked it alot! My only crit is that is the 4th stanza, you change point of view, which kind of disrupts the flow. But still, your poem is great! I liked the 3rd stanza the best. Good job! Very Happy

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Post by Hazel on Mon May 26, 2008 2:23 am

There we go, I fixed it....i think.. Very Happy

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