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Best to Not Know the Truth

Post by Moonlite Knight on Sat May 24, 2008 12:15 am

It is best that you do not know the truth,
That you maintain your innocence for now.
For when I wipe from your eyes that pale sooth
The only thing you’ll say to me is ‘how’.

How could we let the earth be in such a state?
How could we not stop any of the wars?
Is that all that exists here, fear and hate?
Are there no other choices, no other doors?

You won’t understand the politics here,
You’d want to take action, not just wait.
You wouldn’t be like us, who sit and bear,
And let someone else come and be bait.

The truth is something that you’d best not learn,
For when you do, sorrow is all you’ll earn.
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I tried to put a little symbolism in this poem, but I'm not sure if I managed it. Please tell me what
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Re: Best to Not Know the Truth

Post by carino on Sat May 24, 2008 12:35 am

For when I wipe from your eyes that pale sooth
The only thing you’ll say to me is ‘how’.

How could we let the earth be in such a state?
That doesn't make much sense to me. I may be reading it wrong, but in line 3 of the first stanza, it seems like you're taking the truth away so she can maintain innocence.
You wouldn’t be like us, who sit and bear,
And let someone else come and be bait.
That part doesn't quite flow so well for me.

Good poem, though. I liked the idea a lot!!!
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Re: Best to Not Know the Truth

Post by Hazel on Sat May 24, 2008 11:52 pm

Yes I agree that it had a really good point. I liked it. Smile

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