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Post by jeberexa on Wed May 14, 2008 8:49 pm

Here's another poem in my series. This is not one of my best-especially verse two. Please give me some advice. Thanks! Smile

Nature’s Forest,
All around, flowing through the air,
Probably the grandest place,
You’ll find most anywhere.

Listen closely to the following,
The screeching of a monkey,
The stable buzz of a hummingbird,
And the whispering of a bee.

Listen to the silent wind,
As it flutters through the trees.
The rain pattering on a trunk,
Stirring up a jungle breeze.

Alas! The rich cacophony,
Of voices everywhere.
The fine and elaborate beauty,
That really is so rare.

Nature’s Forest,
All around, flowing through the air,
Probably the grandest place,
You’ll find most anywhere.

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Post by 017350 on Sat May 17, 2008 11:39 pm

Well, you did the spacing good on this one. Some fo your others were messed up that way. Good that it rhymes. 8/10

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Post by jeberexa on Sun May 18, 2008 12:43 am

Show me which one I goofed up on!?!
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Post by Sofie on Mon May 19, 2008 1:12 pm

Nice! It captures the feeling of a forest. I like how you repeat the first part partially in the end^^ Makes it sort of complete!
Great job Smile
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Post by Moonlite Knight on Mon May 26, 2008 2:18 am

That was reallly good! It does capture the spirt of a forest. I liked the 3rd stanza the best Great job! Very Happy

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Post by BPahl88 on Thu Jun 26, 2008 5:35 pm

Great job! I like the title actually. Happy
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Post by Hazel on Thu Jun 26, 2008 7:32 pm

This is a really good poem, I realized that I had read it before but never commented, hehe. Great Job!! Very Happy

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