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Ride the wind

Post by Dark Princess on Sun May 11, 2008 2:53 pm

Ride The Wind

Ride the wind
Soar through the skies
See all there is on Earth

Fly through the trees
Listen to the sounds
Of the forest
Listen to the birds
And Their music

Travel up the mountains
Touch their snow capped tops
Feel the cold on your flesh
See the view of the
Valley below.

Ride the wind
See all there is to see
Feel all there is to feel.
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Re: Ride the wind

Post by 017350 on Sun May 11, 2008 3:09 pm

Good. I like it. You might even be able to publish it!

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Post by Hazel on Sun May 11, 2008 6:01 pm

This is really good! Very Happy You're very descriptive!

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Post by Moonlite Knight on Sun May 11, 2008 6:32 pm

That was really good, and I agree with Hazel, really descriptive! Very Happy

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Re: Ride the wind

Post by Darkened Moon on Sun Jun 29, 2008 8:02 pm

W-O-W. Reminde me sis to get you a notebook.
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Re: Ride the wind

Post by BPahl88 on Mon Jun 30, 2008 4:43 am

Very very good! And yes, itis extreamly descriptive! Smile
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Re: Ride the wind

Post by GoMulchGo on Mon Jun 30, 2008 6:20 pm

Excellent! And 017350 is correct, you really could publish it.
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Re: Ride the wind

Post by BlackOpal on Mon Jun 30, 2008 8:28 pm

Cute. Very Happy
I like it a lot.
Great job.

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Re: Ride the wind

Post by Artemis F. on Mon Jun 30, 2008 8:40 pm

It needs something I can't put my finger on...

But otherwise, Very good.

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