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I Want To Be Found

Post by Moonlite Knight on Sat May 10, 2008 12:46 am

In the distance,
Just out of sight.

There they shall stand,
While I am here.

Separated,
Confused and lost.

I want to be
Found, so I may
Go home with them,

All
safe
and
sound.

~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~
This is poem that I wrote when I was kind of depressed, which is why it might be kind of depressing and not really good. Please tell me what you think. Thank you! Happy

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Re: I Want To Be Found

Post by Hazel on Sat May 10, 2008 12:51 am

Oh yea this is kinda sad but it is good. It sort of reminds me of how a lost dog may feel.....or maybe how a sometimes a person can feel lost but it isn't a literal lost.....huh, that's cool that your poem can be taken more then one way. Good Job! Very Happy

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Re: I Want To Be Found

Post by Sofie on Sat May 10, 2008 2:52 pm

Nice metaphore! An inspiring poem. Any feeling successfully portrayed is a fine thing in my opinion, even if the feeling is depression. Good work!^^
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Re: I Want To Be Found

Post by 017350 on Sat May 10, 2008 10:04 pm

Descriptive words. But the spacing could be better.
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Post by Broken Heart on Sat May 10, 2008 10:42 pm

Wonderful, I loved it. I can relate to the poem myself. Very Happy

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Re: I Want To Be Found

Post by jeberexa on Sun May 11, 2008 2:16 pm

I loved the poem! It could be depressing at times, but generally was very descriptive.

And, 017350, poets love to do things like that with their words. Arrange them just to make the poem look more complicated than it actually is. I like the spacing myself! Smile
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Re: I Want To Be Found

Post by BlackOpal on Sun May 11, 2008 8:05 pm

I love the patter of the poem.
The last part was powerful, I loved the way you formatted it.
It's nice, most people can relate to it. Everybody wants to be "found", which makes it all the more effective.
This is the best poem that you've written, I think, and an amazing one all around.
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