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Destined to Die Tomorrow

Post by Moonlite Knight on Thu May 08, 2008 12:10 am

If I were destined to die tomorrow
I would not wish you there right by my side
For I could not bear to see your sorrow,
And by then youd have known that I had lied.

Each time you asked how I felt, Id say fine.
I did not want you to worry for me.
I was ill, but content, for you were just mine,
And I wished, next week, thats how youd still be.

I know that its selfish to think that way,
But even so, I dont want you to go,
No more than you want to say to me bye,
I wish that to deaths face, I could say no.

If I were destined to die tomorrow,
Id pray it be years before you follow.

~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~ Like a Star @ heaven ~
Another attempt at a romantic poem! Kind of depressing too though. Please tell what you think. Thanks! Happy


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Re: Destined to Die Tomorrow

Post by jeberexa on Thu May 08, 2008 12:15 am

Nice job.

By the way, look at your signature Smile
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Re: Destined to Die Tomorrow

Post by Moonlite Knight on Thu May 08, 2008 12:18 am

Hey! what happened to my signature? How could I not even notice? Embarassed Thank you for pointing that out to me, and thanks for telling me what you think. Very Happy

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Re: Destined to Die Tomorrow

Post by Hazel on Thu May 08, 2008 2:30 am

Awesome Poem!!!! I love this one. It's so sad but really good! Very Happy
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Re: Destined to Die Tomorrow

Post by BlackOpal on Fri May 09, 2008 12:59 am

Cute. Very Happy
This is basically the opposite of a whack load of Death Cab songs.
They write about wanting to be with a dieing loved one.
Good idea.
A little cheesy, but altruism sells. Very Happy
Keep it up.
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Re: Destined to Die Tomorrow

Post by Sofie on Fri May 09, 2008 1:09 pm

Aww, how cute!^^ Way and buy don't rhyme all that much, but the way I see it, you pull it off^^

Heh, I see what you're referring to 'bout Death Cab, Opal. x'D
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Re: Destined to Die Tomorrow

Post by Topaz on Wed May 14, 2008 4:51 pm

Kind of sad...but good! Razz
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Re: Destined to Die Tomorrow

Post by Moonlite Squire on Thu May 15, 2008 6:04 am

saddy baddy maddy!!! big sister!!!!!
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