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Post by Darklady on Thu May 01, 2008 6:11 am

A single man glides across the floor,
his feet dancing faster than possible.
A girl enters and joins him,
her feet, small and graceful,
clap gently along the stage.
A group of perople join them,
and they begin to dance in unision;
Their black shoes clicking in a wonderful pattern.
You'd think they were dancing for joy,
but you'd be half right;
They can be a warning,
their feets' claps a signal.
But to an ordinary onlooker,
it is a mesmerizing dance.
The clatter of the feet,
too beautiful to mimic.
Their pattern of dance,
glorious beyond imagining.
They are the leaders of dance.

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Re: Leaders of Dance...

Post by Hazel on Thu May 01, 2008 10:51 pm

I can't remember if I read this one before but oh well if I did cause it's good enough to be commented twice!! That was good I really liked it!!!
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Post by Bran Davies on Thu May 01, 2008 10:54 pm

*falls over* Wow! That was awesome!!
*jumps back up* You are a natural!!!
*grins*
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Post by Darklady on Fri May 02, 2008 2:21 am

Thanks! *Grins Widely*

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Post by Sofie on Fri May 02, 2008 2:59 pm

Amazing. Portrayed the fealing really well!^^
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Re: Leaders of Dance...

Post by jeberexa on Fri May 02, 2008 10:49 pm

Great job, I like your poem.

The only thing I would change is when you say:

"A single man glides across the floor,
his feet dancing faster than possible.
A girl enters and joins him"

The "feet dancing faster than possible is a little cliche' and not that poetic. Also, the "enters" and "joins" are so much alike that is loses the poetic pattern.

It's a wonderful poem, though! Very Happy
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