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Post by jeberexa on Sat Apr 26, 2008 9:53 pm

The following poem is in a style I NEVER write in. I always use the ABCB pattern, and this doesn't even rhyme. But I'm trying to learn new kinds of poetry. So, I invite you to critique as much as you like! Smile

Northern Lights

Everything was silent.
Then, it began.
Slowly, the majestic purple
Started the show
Followed by a parading blue,
Yellow tagged along behind.
After that the green
Made its entrance
Then, they took their places.
The blue and green
Began to dance.
Then a delightful purple
Began to flicker.
Together they
Danced and flickered
Across the northern sky
Leaving a
Magnificent show behind.
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Post by Hazel on Sun Apr 27, 2008 6:07 am

Wow this is really good. I see northern lights all the time since I live up north, and I think that you did a really super good job describing it!!! Mr. Pink
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Post by Moonlite Knight on Mon Jun 09, 2008 6:11 am

I agree, that was really good! Descriptive and it flowed well too. Very Happy

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Post by BPahl88 on Fri Jun 20, 2008 3:51 pm

Very descriptive. Really good! A perfect combination! Very Happy
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