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Fortune In The Ocean

Post by Moonlite Knight on Wed Apr 16, 2008 4:19 am

Look over the side and what do you see?
I see my fortune in the deep blue ocean,
The joy, the woe, everything I値l be.
If you look close, past my reflection,

At the secrets that lie behind my eyes,
At the truth behind the doors in my mind,
The deep blue ocean will show me all your lies.
Look deeper to see if I知 truly kind.

My fortune will show what secrets you致e kept.
And it値l show you if I知 all that I seem.
By not fearing the ocean for it痴 depth
You値l discover the thoughts behind that gleam.

Fear not that which remains hidden from you
Instead, stare in that hypnotizing blue.
Like a Star @ heaven Like a Star @ heaven Like a Star @ heaven Like a Star @ heaven Like a Star @ heaven
Another sonnet! They're teh easiest to
write I think. Anyway, please tell me what
you think. Was it too confusing? Thanks! Happy

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Re: Fortune In The Ocean

Post by BlackOpal on Thu Apr 17, 2008 1:21 am


Fear not that which remains hidden from you
Instead, stare in that hypnotizing blue


That's about all I can say about those lines.

This is really good. It is kind of clich, but a couple of the really original lines make it stand out among the many "I'm not the person you see, I'm different inside" poems.
Good job.
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Re: Fortune In The Ocean

Post by Topaz on Sat Apr 19, 2008 9:40 pm

it's really great!!!!I LOVE it!!!!
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Re: Fortune In The Ocean

Post by jeberexa on Sat Apr 19, 2008 9:48 pm

I really liked it! It was a great poem that really made you think deeply. I could imagine looking over the side of a boat at the ocean! Very Happy
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Re: Fortune In The Ocean

Post by BPahl88 on Tue May 20, 2008 12:55 am

That was great! cheers
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