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Post by Moonlite Knight on Sun Apr 13, 2008 10:58 pm

Fearsome, brave, strong, cold
Its what I try to be.
Powerful, leader, bold.
But Im not what I seem.

Yet no one seems to peer
Through my ages old mask.

I can hurt, cry, fear.
But I continue to bask
In all that glory
They dump upon me.

If only I were
The hero they see.
Like a Star @ heaven Like a Star @ heaven Like a Star @ heaven Like a Star @ heaven
Please tell me what you think! Thanks! Very Happy

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Re: Hero

Post by Hazel on Sun Apr 13, 2008 10:59 pm

This was good! I think that some people can really feel that way to. bounce
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Post by BlackOpal on Sun Apr 13, 2008 11:28 pm

I read something like this before.
This is very good.
It is slightly clich, but very, very slightly.
All in all it is good.
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Post by Moonlite Knight on Sun Apr 13, 2008 11:34 pm

Really? Where did you read it before? And thank you for telling me what you think.

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Post by BlackOpal on Sun Apr 13, 2008 11:44 pm

Not it, something like it.
I just read a similar poem recently on fictionpress.
It wasn't the same though.
This was very good.
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Post by Moonlite Knight on Sun Apr 13, 2008 11:46 pm

Oh, thank you. And what's fictionpress?

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Re: Hero

Post by Broken Heart on Mon Apr 14, 2008 6:29 pm

Very nice!! I give it a two thumbs up! Mr. Pink
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