Hear Me

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Hear Me

Post by Moonlite Knight on Sat Apr 12, 2008 5:59 am

Unclog your ears,
And hear me say
All that I fear.
But if you stay,
Ill tell you all,
All that I know.
It may be small,
But I will glow.
If only you
Will not be blue,
And stay here
And hear me,
Say the truth.
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Did it make any sense?
It's supposed to be about
how people rarely wish to
learn the ugly truth about something,
in case you couldn't tell.
Anyway, please tell me what you thought.
Thank you! Like a Star @ heaven

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Re: Hear Me

Post by BlackOpal on Sat Apr 12, 2008 11:00 am

It's very good. I like it.
The only possible crit I could have is that maybe you didn't describe the fact that it is the "ugly" truth very well. (Wow, that sentence was worded awkwardly)
Great. Very Happy
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