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This World

Post by Moonlite Knight on Thu Apr 10, 2008 5:49 am

I open my eyes and see this world so
Kind and cruel and absolutely divine
For that is how all life was meant to go
In this world were all things are yours and mine

So open your eyes and let the world flow,
Like a mother’s love for her newborn child.
Keep heart, stay strong, don’t lose your unique glow
And maybe, one day, your worries be mild.

Don’t ever give up, was one thing you learned
As a child so young and so true to all.
In this world, respect is one thing you earned
By doing what’s right and standing up tall.

This world will run whether your there or not.
It’s better to just accept all that you’ve got.
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This poem is not really clear, I think. But I tried.
Please tell me what you think.
Thanks! Like a Star @ heaven

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Re: This World

Post by Hazel on Thu Apr 10, 2008 5:51 am

Oh this is soooo good!! Very Happy This one is really cute. I like it bounce
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Re: This World

Post by sweetkiss on Sat Apr 12, 2008 2:09 am

I love it, keep doing poetry =]
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Re: This World

Post by jeberexa on Fri Apr 18, 2008 9:23 pm

I love the subject idea, but I don't always understand the wording with the rhymes. Great job, though! Very Happy
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Re: This World

Post by BlackOpal on Fri Apr 18, 2008 9:45 pm

I love it. Very Happy
You're a great poet.
It's... motivating. It pushes you towards reality.
It makes a childish lesson seem adult and necessary.
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