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Post by Hazel on Thu Apr 10, 2008 5:14 am

((poem removed by author))


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Re: Flying

Post by Moonlite Knight on Thu Apr 10, 2008 5:19 am

Great job! That's really good. I really like the message of the poem, because everyone feels like that at least once in their lives. The flow is pretty good, except near the end, it gets kind of inconsistent. The flow in the beginning was great though. Anyway, that's just my opinion, Keep writting! Rock On!

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Post by BPahl88 on Tue Jul 29, 2008 4:13 pm

It was a great poem! However, I have to agree with Mk, the flow kind of got jumbled up at the end, but most of it was great! (I like the subject too. Very Happy )
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Re: Flying

Post by xStarr_x3 on Tue Jul 29, 2008 4:21 pm

I love the subject in this. Flying just seems like an amazing thing to do (when not in planes..). I like the message of your poem.

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