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Post by Moonlite Knight on Tue Apr 08, 2008 7:08 am

I see the world
through a cold haze,
Apart, alone.

At the edge is
where I shall gaze.
I watch, I dream.

I see through the
fearsome hot blaze.
Away, hidden.

I hear them all
socalize, sad
And hope and think

Why aren't I there
with them, so glad?
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That wasn't my best poem. Please tell me what you think. Thank you Smile


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Re: Apart

Post by Hazel on Thu Apr 10, 2008 5:31 am

I like the messages you send in your poems, i am never confused about what you mean. You are always clear and precice. Very Happy
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