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Post by Moonlite Knight on Tue Apr 08, 2008 7:02 am

They say it is not possible to live
Without the love we all desire so
And yet you left me here alone to thrive
Not knowing that you’d ever stoop so low

They say the young are rude, a bit uncouth,
But there is one thing that they need to know,
I’ll wait here forever to learn the truth
Of why I was left alone in the snow

Yet my heart is as empty as a cave
For you and mother were my first true loves,
How can I just sit there while they say ‘be brave’
As your life flies away like flights of doves?

They say ‘sorry’ as soul and body part,
I hear a loud tear and know it’s my heart.

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This is a sonnet that I had to write for my english class. It's about how someone feels when they lose their father, in case you were unable to tell. Please tell me what you think. Thank you. bounce
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Post by Hazel on Thu Apr 10, 2008 5:27 am

This is fantastic! I like this one the very best. It was so well done. Everything flows so nicely and you have great word choice! Very Happy
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Post by sweetkiss on Mon Apr 14, 2008 7:16 pm

Superb!!
This sonnet touched my heart
(In more ways than one, if you know what I mean)
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Post by BlackOpal on Mon Apr 14, 2008 7:32 pm

Awesome. Very Happy
That's all that I can say, really.
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Post by Topaz on Wed Apr 23, 2008 1:10 am

good...but not as good as secrets by Hazel!!!!
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Post by jeberexa on Wed Apr 23, 2008 9:16 pm

Topaz, this poem is very good, but some people just like different styles. I write my poems a lot like Moonlite Knight, and some people don't like that way. Others like funny rhyming ones. Everybody has different tastes. Smile
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