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Say It Isn't So

Post by Holleh on Wed Mar 23, 2011 11:20 pm

WELL. I'm bored, so I wrote another song poem lyric... Thing. Yeah. xP 'Cause I randomly got the song in my head, with the words and stuff, and then I went to write it like two seconds later, and, AS USUAL, the words never come out like how they are in my head. So inevitably, it's horrible. I guess. I dunno. With this, I was working with repetition a bit. And I didn't want it to be as rhymey as it is, but when I make songs up in my head... Like the flow is off if they don't rhyme in a way. Soo... Yeah. I dunno. And I usually explain the meaning behind each poem lyric song thing, but this one probably speaks for itself. So. Yeah. Hurr we go.

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Ohhh, say it isnít so
Weíre fading away
Running out of room to grow

Leave it alone
Just let it be
There is no future
For you and me

Sorry it didnít work out
Iíve gotta figure myself out now
Paralyzed by fear
Struck down, no way out

And ohhh, say it isnít so
Weíre running out of time
And I just thought Iíd let you know:
Iíve had my share of fun and blame
But if I donít run, Iíll go insane

Say it isnít so
Too hard to let go
But we gotta move on now
Itís too lateÖ

Oh, whoa, oh, say it isnít so
Say it isnít so
Iím not abandoning you
Iím cutting myself off,
So maybe I can get through

And oh, whoa, oh, say it isnít so
Say it isnít so
Just thought Iíd let you know
Iím sorry, sorry
But Iíve gotta let go

And oh, no, oh,
No, it isnít so
Itís too hard to let go
Iíll just drive myself insane
Because in the end,
In the end,
Itís worth the pain

OhhhÖ Say it isnít so
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Re: Say It Isn't So

Post by Hazel on Wed Mar 23, 2011 11:23 pm

This is really good. I like how it rhymes, the flow sounds great to me Razz

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Re: Say It Isn't So

Post by Holleh on Wed Mar 23, 2011 11:25 pm

Thank youuu.
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Re: Say It Isn't So

Post by bibbit on Thu Mar 24, 2011 1:41 am

As far as flow, this could easily be made into a song. I approve.

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Re: Say It Isn't So

Post by BPahl88 on Sat Mar 26, 2011 4:29 am

Affirimive on the flow. I like how you used all the "o's" in there. Happy
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