He's Coming for You

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He's Coming for You

Post by Hazel on Wed Mar 09, 2011 8:53 am

I liked the idea for this one, but I think I executed it poorly seeing it's not scary and it's supposed to be fear. Oh well Smile

Yeah....I might do two on fear since I already wrote one on dreams and colors a long time ago XD Anywho, thoughts?

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Post by xStarr_x3 on Wed Mar 09, 2011 9:57 pm

xD The only stanza I'm not fond of is the one where you're like "Doomed I am now". It just threw off the flow.
but otherwise, good. Not scary, like you said. But good. xP

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