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A Knock on Your Door

Post by Hazel on Thu Feb 24, 2011 8:38 am

It's supposed to be one a day, not sure if that means you can't write more than one......but it's thirty minutes to midnight and I couldn't resist Razz
I'm pleased with this one. It was hard, and I used a different rhyming scheme. Anyways, I put quotes in, I wasn't sure if I needed them but since the narrator changes, I went ahead and just added it. Smile This one is Death.



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Re: A Knock on Your Door

Post by xStarr_x3 on Fri Feb 25, 2011 1:14 am

Ohhhh, I really like this one. c:
Like... a lot. xD
I like how you literally took death knocking on your door and then what he said. I don't have any critique for this. c:

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Re: A Knock on Your Door

Post by Hazel on Fri Feb 25, 2011 1:30 am

Thanks! I'm glad it's good XD It was hard to get in the groove of.
I think it's because I tried Innocence first and failed....all I can think of are nursery rhymes lol.

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Re: A Knock on Your Door

Post by BPahl88 on Sat Feb 26, 2011 12:48 am

Niiiiiice poem. The rhymes are dead on the money. And its the perfect length. Not too short nor to long. Niiiiiice.

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