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Hands of Time

Post by Holleh on Thu Feb 24, 2011 2:55 am

Kind of wanted to practice with metaphor a bit, but... I dunno if this metaphor is really metaphor...y metaphor, so. xP But I kinda like it.

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The clocks,
They mock us

They say one cannot control time
Yet they hold it in their hands

Every tick, a second closer
To the end

Time heals us
It mends the broken
And melts the frozen hearts

We have no control over time
All we can do is wait it out
While the clocks just tick away
Putting their power into play

Without the clocks,
Does time exist?
Or are we stuck
In never-ending bliss?

Ignorance is what it is
Without time, we can’t keep track
Then we’ll lose these moments,
And never get them back

So beware the clocks
The masters of time
They’re numbering your days
And numbering mine

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Post by Hazel on Thu Feb 24, 2011 5:23 am

Whoa this is like my favorite. Love it. Especially the last stanza, how ominous!

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Post by Holleh on Thu Feb 24, 2011 8:36 pm

Thank you. (:

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Post by Broken Heart on Thu Feb 24, 2011 10:03 pm

realllllllllllllly like this! (:

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Post by BPahl88 on Sat Feb 26, 2011 12:39 am

I'll be dead honest, that was flat out amazing.

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Post by Holleh on Sat Feb 26, 2011 12:45 am

Wow, thanks, everyone. :3

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Post by Holleh on Tue Mar 01, 2011 1:14 am

I know this is a double post, buuut...
So my school has this literary magazine thing, and for English class, we can submit two pieces to the magazine for up to fifteen bonus points.
I was kind of thinking about submitting this poem... I get the points just for submitting it, but I kind of want it to make it to the actual magazine if I do submit it. xP SO WHAT DO YOU GUYS THINK? Should I submit it?

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Post by Hazel on Tue Mar 01, 2011 2:33 am

Yes! Do it! I think it's good enough anyways.

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Post by BPahl88 on Tue Mar 01, 2011 2:48 am

*chants* Do it do it!!!

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