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Dear Whoever,

Post by Holleh on Thu Feb 24, 2011 2:28 am

Just another something I pieced together. Kind of venting, but, I guess that's just poetry for ya. Also, is it supposed to be "whomever" or I am right? NO ONE ANSWERED ME. xP

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Dear Whoever,

Talking isnít easy anymore
And silence doesnít help
So Iíll write these words to you,
In hopes youíll understand

Iím a person;
I have flaws
Canít win all the time;
Life is just a bunch of draws

Iím insecure,
And canít trust easily
But that doesnít mean
You should give up on me

I get mad over little things
Depressed over the insignificant
But Iím just a person
What more do you want?

I love to argue
The great game of debate
But it comes at quite a cost,
So Iíll leave that up to fate

Dear whoever,
Youíre a person too
Youíve made mistakes
But I wonít give up on you
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Re: Dear Whoever,

Post by bibbit on Thu Feb 24, 2011 2:57 am

Your poems kind of contradict each other. xP I'm not saying that's really bad or anything... just pointing it out.

Also I love the last stanza.

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Re: Dear Whoever,

Post by Holleh on Thu Feb 24, 2011 2:57 am

Eh, how so? =P
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Post by bibbit on Thu Feb 24, 2011 3:02 am

"Angry? I Wish" implies that you don't get mad often, you're not insecure, and you don't apologize.
"I Said Sorry, You Walked Away" is all about apology.
"Dear Whoever" says you get mad easily and are insecure.

just sayin. ;P

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Re: Dear Whoever,

Post by Holleh on Thu Feb 24, 2011 3:04 am

"Angry? I Wish" is kind of directed... at a situation. xP Not general feelings. And actually, it does say I'm insecure. "You have no idea," implies that the person it's directed to doesn't even realize how much so.

Okay, yes, BUT that's like... Okay shut up. xP I mean, it takes a lot for me to.

I do get mad easily and I am insecure, yes.

Plus, according to another poem of mine, I'm the living contradiction, so there ya go. =P
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