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Post by Holleh on Wed Feb 23, 2011 11:59 pm

So this is more like... Well, it's self-explanatory. I've noticed that I act angry sometimes when I'm not... But yeah. This isn't really about one situation in particular; just in general, what.. Like... Seems to happen to me. I dunno. ENJOY. xP

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You think Iím angry
Iím just good at acting
Why canít you see the truth?
I feel so far away from you

You want the truth?
Well here it is
Black and white
Plain as day

Iím not angry;
Just so hurt,
So betrayed,
Beaten, broken, and frayed

You said youíd never give up on me
What happened to that?
What did I ever do?
Iím not even angry with you

You want my trust?
My faith, too?
I need to know I can count on you

Iím so hurt
So broken inside
Canít you see
I just canít swallow my pride?

I wonít apologize
Thatís just not me
Really, can you not see?

Everyone always leaves
Is there something wrong with me?
Friends fleet, flee, run away
What do I have to do to make you stay?

You think I have trust issues
You think Iím insecure
Truth is?
You have no idea

Being angry would be so easy
Itís simple to pretend I am
To show you the pain, the hurt;
That takes strength

I would tell you everything
But then Iíd be so vulnerable
And there youíd be,
Capable of destroying me

So Iíll wait
And take the pain
Fake the anger
Go insane

Angry?
I wish.
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Post by Hazel on Thu Feb 24, 2011 1:07 am

I like it. I think this can be true for a lot of people. I love the last line though Smile

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Post by Holleh on Thu Feb 24, 2011 1:29 am

Thank youu. :3
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Post by BPahl88 on Thu Feb 24, 2011 1:33 am

That second to last stanza is awesome! So true sometimes. Overall I'd say its pretty darn good. Smile
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Post by bibbit on Thu Feb 24, 2011 2:09 am

Jeez, you people write a lot of emo poems. ;P
I actually like it a lot though. The only thing really wrong with it (in my opinion) is that some of the rhymes seem a little forced. But that's nitpicking.

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Post by Holleh on Thu Feb 24, 2011 2:12 am

Well, seeing as poems are meant to express emotion...
And yeahh, I know.
ALSO. Mr. Grammarness. Would it be "Dear Whoever" or "Dear Whomever?"
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Post by bibbit on Thu Feb 24, 2011 2:28 am

I guess whomever, since it's similar to saying "to whomever."

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Post by Holleh on Thu Feb 24, 2011 2:29 am

...Thank you for answering when I already posted it... INCORRECTLY. xP
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Post by bibbit on Thu Feb 24, 2011 2:49 am

JEEZ SORRY. maybe you should have waited. :p

I've actually seen it used both ways. "Dear Whoever" has been used as a band name.

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Post by Holleh on Thu Feb 24, 2011 2:53 am

YOU WERE TAKING TOO LONG.
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