Tired of my Escape

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Tired of my Escape

Post by Holleh on Sun Feb 13, 2011 5:56 am

So, I've been meaning to write more poetry/songs lately, and, well, I got inspired by a song I was listening today. "Unconscious Reality" by Artist vs. Poet. So this is similar in meaning, but not exactly. Just like... They're both kind of about sleeping. Metaphorically. Sort of. Mine implies literal sleeping and metaphorical. So. Yeah. It's half decent, and meant to be a song, hence the repeating choruses and the bridges and stuff. I played with rhyming a bit, just because I wanted to attempt a decent rhyming poem instead of another free verse one. It's not that great, but I kind of like it. So. Enjoy.

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Thereís a brighter side, Iím sure
Just donít wanna be so tired anymore
I wanna dream while Iím awake
So sleep wonít have to be an escape

Which way to go?
When you donít even know
Just gotta keep being myself
ĎCause I canít be anyone else
I canít believe
My only escape is sleep
Gotta break the habit
Gotta snap out of it
This is my life
And itís time to start living it

Iím the insomniac whoís always tired
I guess thatís just the way my brainís wired
Iíd rather stay awake
But Iím too drowsy for my sake

Which way to go?
When you donít even know
Just gotta keep being myself
ĎCause I canít be anyone else
I canít believe
My only escape is sleep
Gotta break the habit
Gotta snap out of it
This is my life
And itís time to start living it

Canít keep my eyes open
Canít keep them shut
Want to start living
Havenít had enough
Iíd rather feel the pain
Instead of being so numb
So afraid that when I sleep
Iíll never wake up
Then Iíll be stuck
In a life just as empty as me

Waiting for my reality
To become just as great as my dreams
Getting ready for the horrible
Bracing for the terrible
So tired of living in an escape

Which way to go?
When you donít even know
Just gotta keep being myself
ĎCause I canít be anyone else
I canít believe
My only escape is sleep
Gotta break the habit
Gotta snap out of it
This is my life
And itís time to start living it

Which way to go?
When you donít even know
Just gotta keep being myself
ĎCause I canít be anyone else
I canít believe
My only escape is sleep
Gotta break the habit
Gotta snap out of it
This is my life
And itís time to start living it

Itís time to start living itÖ


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Re: Tired of my Escape

Post by xStarr_x3 on Sun Feb 13, 2011 6:06 am

I like it. :3
The only line that I feel throws off the flow is, "Then I'll be stuck, In a life just as empty as me"
..And the typo I pointed out. xPP

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