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Need To Feel

Post by xStarr_x3 on Sun Oct 31, 2010 7:50 pm

Two small poems. xD The first one is acrostic. The second one is... free-verse, like most of my poems. They both have the same theme and are going under the same title, sort of like companion pieces. Chyeah.
Tell me which one you like more and give me some critique, if you feel like it.



I can't feel. I'm

Closed off, there's nothing there.
And I want to feel so badly.
Not feeling hurts me more
Than actually feeling. But,

Feeling isn't
Everything. Who wants to be
Engaged with everything around them. I'd agree, but I'd be
Lying.





I can't feel anything.
There's nothing, I'm numb.
I want to feel so badly.

But who wants to feel anyway.

Feeling isn't everything.
Who wants to cry when they're sad
Or smile when they're happy.

Why can't I feel.

I need to feel.
Because not feeling is
Worse than actually feeling.

I feel dead on the inside.

I'm simply a blank canvas,
Always waiting, always wanting.
And never able to be painted.

Why should I be the only one.

I need that flicker of life
That tells me I'm alive
And that I'm real.

Because I am real. (Aren't I.)

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