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I Can See You

Post by xStarr_x3 on Thu Sep 23, 2010 2:16 am

I'll never understand you,
You and your so-called 'realistic' views
That often border on the pessimistic.
Nor the way that you claim that
"It's impossible to be happy"
When you don't care enough to try.

I'm not sure why
You always look so happy,
When, on the inside, you're dying.
You cut your wrists instead of
Showing the emotions, that so
Dearly need to be seen.

It's weird for someone to think
That 16-0 isn't a desirable score.
You'd rather have the 16-1,
Than rack another number up
For the winning team
Of life.

You don't seem able to
Escape from the past.
You refuse to acknowledge
That there is always going to be a future,
And there's always going to be one for you.
Even when you can't see one for yourself.

I don't get why
You think that nobody cares,
Or cares enough to understand
What you're going through.
You think that you're so different?
You think that you can just run and hide?

Well I've got news for you, kid,
There's nowhere you can go.
Because I can see you,
And I care enough to know
When someone needs
A shoulder to lean on.

Feel free to lean on me,
It's what I'm here for.
And comes with the job,
My self-proclaimed title of
'People-fixer'.
Because I care enough to see you.

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Does this need explaining? I'm sure some bits of it do, but I'd rather have people try and draw their own inferences from the text than having myself flat-out tell you.. And, I have to go. So. xP

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Re: I Can See You

Post by Holleh on Thu Sep 23, 2010 2:27 am

This is about that friend of yours, right? o:
I liked this. ^^ The only part I got confused on was the score thing, with the 16-0 and 16-1, but I'm sure that's because of my own easily confused self. xP
Great message, too.
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Re: I Can See You

Post by bibbit on Thu Sep 23, 2010 3:56 am

Neato burrito. The only thing that bothers me is that on a few of the lines near the beginning, you split the sentences into lines in somewhat awkward places. That's just nitpicking though. (:

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Re: I Can See You

Post by xStarr_x3 on Thu Sep 23, 2010 8:23 pm

Yeah, about that friend of mine. xP
The 16-0 and 16-1.. 16-0 is his current score: The amount of times he's tried to commit suicide, vs. the amount of times he's actually succeeded.

Pick one out, Tim? xD They all sound pretty fine to me. Some were split to put more emphasis on certain phrases as well.

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Re: I Can See You

Post by Holleh on Thu Sep 23, 2010 10:39 pm

Ohh. I see now.
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Re: I Can See You

Post by bibbit on Fri Sep 24, 2010 4:13 am

"You cut your wrists instead of
Showing the emotions, that so
Dearly need to be seen."

Mostly just that one.

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