tis not a poem per-say but i'm counting it as one. forgive me!

so this is the "power paragraph" for the story i'm writing. it's kind of poetic. what i'm really looking for is lots of power and deeper meaning in it. it may seem strange not knowing the context it's in.. but i'm trying not to say in case anyone reads it. (could be considered a major spoiler alert). anyhow; read, enjoy, critique, pull apart, reconstruct, whatever you've got to do, fellow writers! (ps.. have to be up in a very short amount of time. i need to cure this insomnia. and also anemia. iron tablets, please! (it's much too late for me, i apologize))

“Can’t you see what’s happening?
Ideas have become sacred while lives have become disposable.
The road we’re on is one that will end sooner than we think,
and someone has to step up and help us cross the canyon.
Why can’t it be you?
Of all dreams you’ve dreamed, has this ever crossed your mind?
Has the thought of saving all life ever entered into a world where anything can happen?
Why hasn’t it?
Villains are just the creatures who didn’t have the strength to become heroes.
Don’t let yourself become a villain.
Don’t grow weak.
Save us.
Save us all.
What’s to lose?
If you succeed, we will forever be indebted to you,
and if you fail, at least you will rest easy knowing that you were the only one brave enough to try.
Help us, not because you have to, but because it’s right.”

tis the quote. it's got merit to be in the poetry section, right? i spaced it out so it looked more like a poem . i'm witty and a genius. no. i'm just very very tired. yikes ok. looking forward to some feedback! please don't hate me because it's not an honest poem! (and it kind of is!) (i used this smiley only because it makes me laugh every time i post. that is one very scared emoticon!)

wow. I love it. It's very powerful.
I would call it a poem; I don't see why not. (:

My favourite line..
"Villians are just the creatures that didn't have the strength to become heroes."
There are others, but that one has to be my absolute favourite. ^^
I like the strength and power behind the words. It's an amazing piece. I'd love to read the story when it's done. (:

i do have the prologue for the story up here.. right now i believe it's titled "untitled sci-fi-ish story." i have the first three chapters written of it and this little poem thing. i'm currently working on an extension for one of my other stories though so i'm not working on this story right now (i am having chapter 4 troubles ) anyhow thanks both of you for your feedback!

Ohh, I'm going to have to go find it. And then read it. (:
I understand the part about writers' block. I just hope it doesn't stop you from completing the story. ^^