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The Living Contradiction

Post by Holleh on Wed May 12, 2010 10:39 pm

Okay, so... In a somewhat darkish place, but I write dark stuff best, so. This song/poem is like... Basically explaining how I feel so conflicted with myself, like everything about me is a contradiction. Well... YOU'LL SEE. xD It's not the best, I know. Just had to vent my feelings somehow. So... Here goes. Oh, and it's kind of long. Like 3 1/4 pages on Word. It got a little rambly and I can never stop myself. xP So, read at your own risk. xD

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How is it possible
To hate yourself so much
That youíre in love?

How can you laugh
When happiness
Is miles away?

Why do we lie
To those
We care so much about?

Why are we so quiet
When we need
To scream or shout?

How is it possible
To hate yourself so much
That youíre in love?

How can I be
So smart
Iím stupid?

How am I
So funny
When I canít tell a joke?

How do I
Understand everything
But know nothing?

How do I
Sing so well
Iím terrible?

How do I smile
When Iím just about
To break down?

Why do I
Cry when
I feel so loved?

Why do I
Reject these compliments
When Iíve been waiting so long?

Maybe I believe
Iím the living contradiction
Iím so sad I laugh
Iím so afraid Iím brave
I feel so good when Iím at my worst
I canít stand to be hurt but I love the pain
And I canít believe in loving myself
But I can love just about everyone else
Iím so selfless, but so selfish
Iím so content, but so jealous

How do I feel
So beautiful
But terrible?

How do I
Feel so worthless
Yet Iím conceited?

How can I
Hate myself
But love every minute
Of being me?
How do I feel the same
Yet so unique?
Why do I love the snow
But smile when I see that sun glow?
Why do I
Go with my brain
When I trust my instincts?
Why am I
So afraid to let go
When I feel
Like Iíve already lost control?

Yes, I believe Iím the living contradiction
And I know itís the not the healthiest condition
More like a half-fulfilling addiction

How do I
Put the pieces
Back together
When they were
Never really together at all?
How can I
Blame myself
When it never really
Was my fault?
How am I
So loud
Iím quiet?
How do I
Feel everything
But feel nothing at all?

How am I
So boring
Iím interesting?
So colorful,
So dull?

How can I
Matter most
When I donít matter at all?
And how do
I catch myself
When Iím about to fall?

How do I
Live in the past
But live for the future?

Why do I
Like night
When Iím afraid of the dark?

Why is
The rain so soothing?
And why is
The music so moving?

How can I
Be so clueless
Yet know what Iím doing?

Why do I
Believe that nothing is impossible
But nothingís ever possible for me?
How can I
Be so blind
I see?

Why is
Everything so hard
Itís easy?

How can I
Hate myself
When I just wanna be me?

How can I
Believe in chance
When I believe in destiny?

How can I
Feel so real
But see in fiction?

How do I
Believe in love
When I donít know what it is?

Yes, I believe Iím the living contradiction

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Re: The Living Contradiction

Post by xStarr_x3 on Wed May 12, 2010 11:38 pm

I love how you kept almost the same scheme throughout the poem.
If you really feel this way, you're right: this is a huge contradiction. And to feel it about yourself? I'd go crazy. xD
I like it. ^^

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Re: The Living Contradiction

Post by Holleh on Wed May 12, 2010 11:43 pm

Thank youu.

Aha, yeah, I know. xP But I do consider myself crazy, soo. xD
My other song/poem thingy that I am trying to come up with is about craziness/therapy.

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Re: The Living Contradiction

Post by BPahl88 on Thu May 13, 2010 1:02 am

I'm not sure what type of poem it is. It's mainly free verse, but I see when you rhymed, you did it on purpose. I'm not sure if I hate it like that, or love it. Hmm...

Another thing is its almost too long. I really like and stress the importance of in poems, give many examples or.. uh, what's the word? Shoot. But you know what I mean. You gave too many. If its gunna be a long poem, make it a trememdous poem. (I'm not saying yours isn't, but... ya know. Wink)

Some of the contridictions you stated were fantastic, fabulous, and great. Others were abit... unreal and unessasary. This all ties into the length- proof read it and select only the ones that you think REALLY gives into your poem. (On the other hand- HECK! If your school assignment was to make a poem 3 pages long on a word document, by all means! Happy )

Now, wether or not you actually WANTED it to be complete free verse or... semi-free verse, what I wouldv'e done was put this line-
"How can I
Feel so real
But see in fiction?"-
as the last contridiction. That why, you rlast line would've rhymed with the stanza above. That would've made the poem epic. And I mean, EPIC.

But in this case, what MADE the poem was the last line. That was the one line (and the last) that summed up the entire poem in a short, sweet sentance. It basically the largest ride of the rollercoaster. You go up and up and up, then you fal down and the drama increases, the buide-up increases, then at the very botton of the hill, that;s the best oart because that's when you're going the A)Fastest and B) you get that swift turn. Man, I love me coasters. Smile

But in conclusion, I loved it. Could've has some treaking, but overall, an absolutly stunning poem that gets into at LEAST my top 10, most probally 5. Trust me on this, that poem was incredible

ANd I hope this helps. Razz

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Re: The Living Contradiction

Post by Holleh on Thu May 13, 2010 1:08 am

Thank you, BP.
Like I said, just needed a way to vent, mostly. Because I feel all emo today and stuff. I do get what you mean, though. Some of the parts I did feel were unnecessary, but they were all some things that have been on my mind.
And yeah, I try not to make my poems all rhymey, but if I can fit a few in, I do.
I appreciate the feedback.

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Re: The Living Contradiction

Post by BPahl88 on Thu May 13, 2010 1:12 am

Welcome. Here to help any way I can because I... am... STUPENDOUS MAN!!!!! O.o

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