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Wolves

Post by Topaz on Tue Jan 26, 2010 9:27 pm

Wolves are howling day and night,
when it's dark and when it's bright.
They are always finding prey,
in the night and in the day.

Other wolves are enemies,
stealing prey as much as they please.
Then there comes the time to fight,
that is when they scratch and bite.

All those cubs!Can they survive,
to help the wolves to hunt and thrive?
And when their life comes to an end,
some mournful howls are in the wind.

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Re: Wolves

Post by Holleh on Tue Jan 26, 2010 11:30 pm

I like it. :3
They only part I think could be improved...

Other wolves are enemies,
stealing prey as much as they please.

I think the rhythm was a bit off there. Otherwise, though, I think it was pretty good. ^^

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