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Welcome to reality

Post by OliviaofBolivia on Sun Jul 12, 2009 12:27 am

Welcome to reality
Im slipping out of my fantasy world
Im loosing control
Nothing is what it once was

When did I have to grow up?
When did I stop believing?
When did I cease to be?
When did I grow up?

Reality is the thing I have been running from
Reality is the darkest place I know
Reality hit me over the head and woke me up
It's arms outstretched welcoming me to it's world

There is nothing nice about reality
There is nothing safe about it
There is no comfort
There is no cushion

It's really scary
Its really terrifying
It's really REAL

I can't escape anywhere
I cant run
I cant hide
I cant do anything but face it

Thats when it hit me
That's when it caught me
That's when its hands grabbed me
Thats when it's hands turned me around sharply
Thats when it stuck it's face up against mine and breathed these three words

Welcome to Reality

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Re: Welcome to reality

Post by 2bAgen. on Sun Jul 12, 2009 3:14 pm

I liked it.

I like that fact that in each... stanza (whatever you call those thingies) each line started with the same few words.

And I spotted some mistakes.

Im slipping out of my fantasy world
Im loosing control
Im - I'm
loosing - losing

It's arms outstretched welcoming me to it's world
it's - its


Its really terrifying
its - it's

I cant run
I cant hide
I cant do anything but face it
cant - can't

Thats when it hit me
Thats when it's hands turned me around sharply
Thats when it stuck it's face up against mine and breathed these three words
thats - that's
it's - its

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Re: Welcome to reality

Post by Broken Heart on Mon Jul 13, 2009 1:19 pm

OOO.

I like it =)

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Re: Welcome to reality

Post by Hazel on Mon Jul 13, 2009 7:01 pm

Haha I want to live in my fantasy world Razz

I really liked it as well! cheers

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