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New Hue

Post by Ninva on Fri May 29, 2009 7:06 pm

Cold air has passed away –
The purple sun hazes upon this earthly turquoise meadow
Of once dead, dry plants recovering from the snow’s blast.
Life is full of color –
Hot pink grass,
The bark on trees is tinted green.

No drugged induced dream –
Could cause this array of adverse chromas.
It was all in the moment of spring.

Birds did not sing –
They danced.
Squirrels did not appear –
They flew.
Humans did beam –
They drew and wrote of the saturation of spring.

No object seemed to match.
All the laws of physics expunged.
Neither man nor woman could explain
How the world became rearranged.

But through the confusion came understanding.
The humans accepted the new hue.
They liked the red waves of water,
The pale blue dirt,
Oddly dark shaded leaves,

And all humans –
No more black and white –
They were all beautifully painted
Blues, Greens, and Yellows.

Each one was different,
But no one disagreed
That through such aberration
Came a great statement:
Life does not come in
Life is full of iridescence
That comes from you and me.

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Re: New Hue

Post by xStarr_x3 on Fri May 29, 2009 7:09 pm

o: I like it.
The ending turns it from a dream-like poem into one that's more serious.
I suck at critiquing. xD But good job.~

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Holleh talks hotter than the sun. ;o
Holleh is an IN-SPURR-AY-SHUN. Believe it.
She thinks an artichoke is a type of fish.
She also gives lap-dances. To beds.
Holleh can van like a man.

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Re: New Hue

Post by Hazel on Fri May 29, 2009 10:13 pm

Hmm yes I like it too. I like the imagery and it's a nice topic too XD

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