Nature's Forest
Nature's Forest
by jeberexa on Wed May 14, 2008 12:49 pm
Here's another poem in my series. This is not one of my best-especially verse two. Please give me some advice. Thanks! 
Nature’s Forest,
All around, flowing through the air,
Probably the grandest place,
You’ll find most anywhere.
Listen closely to the following,
The screeching of a monkey,
The stable buzz of a hummingbird,
And the whispering of a bee.
Listen to the silent wind,
As it flutters through the trees.
The rain pattering on a trunk,
Stirring up a jungle breeze.
Alas! The rich cacophony,
Of voices everywhere.
The fine and elaborate beauty,
That really is so rare.
Nature’s Forest,
All around, flowing through the air,
Probably the grandest place,
You’ll find most anywhere.
Nature’s Forest,
All around, flowing through the air,
Probably the grandest place,
You’ll find most anywhere.
Listen closely to the following,
The screeching of a monkey,
The stable buzz of a hummingbird,
And the whispering of a bee.
Listen to the silent wind,
As it flutters through the trees.
The rain pattering on a trunk,
Stirring up a jungle breeze.
Alas! The rich cacophony,
Of voices everywhere.
The fine and elaborate beauty,
That really is so rare.
Nature’s Forest,
All around, flowing through the air,
Probably the grandest place,
You’ll find most anywhere.
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Just because you don't take an interest in politics doesn't mean politics won't take an interest in you! -Pericles
Re: Nature's Forest
by 017350 on Sat May 17, 2008 3:39 pm
Well, you did the spacing good on this one. Some fo your others were messed up that way. Good that it rhymes. 8/10
Re: Nature's Forest
by Sofie on Mon May 19, 2008 5:12 am
Nice! It captures the feeling of a forest. I like how you repeat the first part partially in the end^^ Makes it sort of complete!
Great job
Great job
Re: Nature's Forest
by Moonlite Knight on Sun May 25, 2008 6:18 pm
That was reallly good! It does capture the spirt of a forest. I liked the 3rd stanza the best Great job! 
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Re: Nature's Forest
by BPahl88 on Thu Jun 26, 2008 9:35 am
Great job! I like the title actually. 
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Some say the glass is half empty, Some say the glass is half full, I say "Are you gonna drink that?"
Crazy is a relative term in my family!
JOIN THE KINGDOM OF DARKNESS! (We have cookies and doughnuts.)
*Sigh* If it were only my sister. ...In a city, in a country, in a contanent, on a planet. Sheesh. Be more specific.
Re: Nature's Forest
by Hazel on Thu Jun 26, 2008 11:32 am
This is a really good poem, I realized that I had read it before but never commented, hehe. Great Job!!
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